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Karen Wei, my new classmate in Nantai this semester. We will be friends two years. She comes from Taichung that is a lovely city. She graduated from Department of Applied Foreign Language at Taichung Institute Technology. Karen is born in traditional family that there are six people in her family.
When she has free time, she enjoys singing, reading, and surfing the internet. We went to night sing last two weeks, she sang well. Karen is a cute girl, and sometimes quite and sometimes crazy. In the future, she wants to study at graduate school or go abroad to study but have not decided what kind of subjects. She wants to be a translator. About her life philosophy is " The most important thing is to live happily".
In the fact, we are graduated from the same school, so feel cordial with hsr. Think she is an independent, special, interesting and cute girl after I know her. That is fun when we played together, as well as I am very admire her for her long hair.
Finally, I am very happy to be classmates with her, and I hope we can play in Taichung together one day, no matter go shopping or go to the movies that well be fun I think. I enjoy our time together.
When she has free time, she enjoys singing, reading, and surfing the internet. We went to night sing last two weeks, she sang well. Karen is a cute girl, and sometimes quite and sometimes crazy. In the future, she wants to study at graduate school or go abroad to study but have not decided what kind of subjects. She wants to be a translator. About her life philosophy is " The most important thing is to live happily".
In the fact, we are graduated from the same school, so feel cordial with hsr. Think she is an independent, special, interesting and cute girl after I know her. That is fun when we played together, as well as I am very admire her for her long hair.
Finally, I am very happy to be classmates with her, and I hope we can play in Taichung together one day, no matter go shopping or go to the movies that well be fun I think. I enjoy our time together.
posted by mjk at 10:24 AM
4 Comments:
1."Karen Wei,my new classmate in Nantai this semester." You can write" Karen Wei is my new classmate in Nantai this semester."
2.In the second paragraph, the word "internet" is wrong. You have to change the "i" into "I".
3.In the third paragraph, there is something wrong with the first sentence.
In paragraph 2, "Karen is a cute girl, and sometimes quite.." Maybe you have the wrong spelling of "quiet".
In the beginning of the third paragraph, "In the fact" should be "In fact". And the sentence "Think she is an independent...", I think you have missed an "I". "I think...."
In paragraph 1, "We will be friends two years", I think "We will be friends for two years/in next two years." would be better.
1. In paragraph 3,"In the fact" you can write "In fact"
2. In paragraph 3,"so feel cordial with hsr."I don't know what is "hsr",maybe it means "her".
3. "That is fun when we played together."The vrb should be "play".
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